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例：Verb to be ：the use of leaf blowers before 8 am is a violation of local noiseabatement laws.
Action verb ：the use of leaf blowers before 8 am violates local noise abatementlaws.
例：Verb to be ：The quarterback’s wretched performance was a disgrace to his team.
Action verb ：The quarterback’s wretched performance humiliated his team.
例：Verb to be ：Jamie was happy to be part of the all-star soccer team.
Action verb ： Being a part of the all-star soccer team thrilled Jamie.
例：Passive Voice ：the main idea for my essay was stated as the first sentence in thefirst paragraph.
Active Voice ： I stated the main idea of my essay in the first sentence in thefirst paragraph.
Passive voice ： money for the new recreation building was raised quickly.
Active voice: the recreation committee quickly raised money for thenew building.
少general words，多增加specific images。这两者怎么区别呢?我们来举个例子，car就是general words，因为车的种类有很多，而Benz SUV 就是specific words。在考试的中，多使用specific words可以帮助把物体解释的更清楚，读者也会获得更多的信息，使他们对你的文章更方便了解。
例1：General ：Tom got into his car and drove off.
Specific ：Tom leaped into his SUV and roared off.
例2：General: My coach illustrates the point about playing fairly.
Specific: My basketball coach, Ms Berry, illustrates the essay- ist’s pointabout playing fairly.
例3：General: At the end of the day, the workmen walked up thesnow-covered road.
Specific: At the end of the day, the tired workmen trudged wearilyup the snow-covered road.
在写作中，有的同学习惯使用一些例如 ugly as sin, pretty as a picture之类的词汇。在这里，小编建议大家不要使用这类词汇。因为在使用这些词汇的时候，会给读者一种陈词滥调、平淡无味的感觉，更有可能使读者误会你本身的意思。
General ：I was shaking in my boots before the interview,but I was happy as alark when the personnel manager offered me the job.
Improved ：I was terrified before the interview, but I was ecstatic when thepersonnel manager offered me the job.
例：To facilitate input by the maximum number of potential purchasers,questionnaires were designed and posted well in advance of the launch of thepromotional marketing campaign.
Improved ：Before we began advertising, we designed and mailed a marketingsurvey to find out what customers were looking for.
例1：Brian’s mother reprimanded him for blowing his physic test.
Improved ：Brian’s mother reprimanded him for failing his physic test.
例2：Close-support, transport, and reconnaissance assistance is providedby the S-3X helicopter, which is the most cost effective in a craneconfiguration.
Improved ：The S-3X helicopter provides support, transportation, andreconnaissance. However, the helicopter is most cost effective when it works asa crane.
例1：The glee club held a fund-raiser, the basketball team also held afundraiser.
Improved sentences ：The glee club and the basketball team held fundraisers (compoundsubject).
例2：The most valuable player on the basketball team will give thegraduation speech. She is the star of this year’s musical.
Improved sentences: The most valuable player on the basketball team,who is also the star of this year’s musical, will give the graduation speech (appositive).
例3：The wide receiver ran down the field. He caught the winningtouchdown pass.
Improved sentences: Running down the field, the wide receiver caughtthe winning pass (modifying phrase).