关于GRE写作框架的三个问题

　　在GRE考试中GRE写作是我们备考的一个难点，不少学生只重视词汇和语法水平的提升，忽略了文章的框架和提纲等问题，这就导致了我们文章脉络不清、杂乱无章。接下来我们就讨论一下关于文章框架的三个问题！

　　缺乏支撑的细节

　　仅仅有合适的例证是不够的，我们还需要在文章中提供足够的细节来解释例子如何支持观点。比如某同学写的issue 65 (Every individual in a society has aresponsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws)的其中一个中间段：

　　There will surely be concerns about the consequences of implementingunjust laws and forcing people to obey them. To address such concerns, thereshould be ways through which people can express their disagreement within thelegal framework. For example, laws once gave people different rights based ontheir race or gender, which was totally unjust. Martin Luther King Jr. and hisfollowers chose to express their disagreement in a peaceful way, to call forattention on the inequity and urge the improvements of laws. Similarly, withlegal pretests feminists expressed their requirements on equal pay, equalrights of vote and other social rights. In such ways, unjust laws would beabolished and replaced by just laws, without driving the whole society intochaos.

　　这里主题句里提到了consequences，但是后面的讨论中并没有具体指出是什么后果。例子中提到的laws once gave people different rights based on their race or gender, which was totally unjust这句话显得比较笼统，可能加上 in the US这个限定词会更好一些。总的来说这段写的不算太差，相信还有很多同学在写中间段的时候都面临没有很好地解释例证的问题。

　　不合适的主旨句或主题句

　　总所周知，我提出的1+3模型是以开头段的主旨句和中间段的主题句为基本框架的。有些同学在运用这个模型时，对主旨句和主题句内容的设置上出现偏差。这种偏差的出现就意味着整篇文章基本上废掉了。因此，强烈建议初学者不要急于写全文，而应该先写提纲，找版友对提纲提意见结合我的范文思路修改提纲后再写全文。比如某同学写的issue 34 (In any situation, progressrequires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view)的主旨句是这样的：

　　Whether the statement holds true depends onwhich area we are discussing here. In scientific research, it is absolutelytrue that progress often times requires discussion among people who havecontrasting points of view. similarly, in politics, the eclectic solutionsbetween two parties holding contrasting views are often better than the eitherof the two extreme ones. However, in the business world, contrasting points ofviews would often times do more harm than good.

　　很明显这位同学在用1+3模型，这是值得肯定的。但是，接下来的中间段主题句是这样的：

　　To begin with, scientificresearch showed that taking in the contributions of two contrasting points ofviews often gives rise to a new and more accurate description of the fact.

　　这里的主题句是在回应主旨句中的第一个要点。然而仔细看看我们会发现，两者之间并没有很好地呼应。主旨句讲的是在科研这个语境中这个命题是成立的，而主题句中却在讨论某个科研结果显示这个命题是成立的，而这个科研所研究的讨论是在何种语境下发生却未具体指明。

　　不合适或不相干的例证

　　找到合适的例证论述和支撑自己的观点是GRE写作(尤其是issue)的重点和难点。坊间有些参考书脱离真题的具体问题而罗列出一些所谓的干货，看起来内容很丰富，但对于实际的写作没有太大的帮助。要想写出好的文章，首先要在开始写作前就想好合适的例证支撑观点，而不是一边想一边写。

　　有一位同学再写issue 33的时候提到一个很偏门的例子：Today,as people know more knowledge about sleep, they understand that sleep paralysisis a common disease caused by stress and can manage to recover. 这里sleep paralysis 也许是相关的例子但是由于读者可能没听说过，所以也不宜在考场上使用。

　　以上就是GRE写作框架的三个问题，希望大家根据自身情况制定合理的复习计划，同时小编提醒大家，在备考中千万不能忽略语法和词汇的重要性！如果想要了解更多关于GRE词汇书推荐、GRE写作时间的信息，可以在线咨询我们或添加客服微信kewo11！