高分冲刺练习：AEIS作文范文修改（一）

AEIS作文绝对是所有学生最头疼的题目，对于作文没有技巧，那就是要背！范！文！每天1小时的作文练习，建议大家分为两个阶段，每个阶段3个星期左右， 第一个30分钟，用来找一篇作文题目，然后朗读范文，找出好词好句，然后继续朗读，至基本熟练，这是上午。然后可以用中午休息的时间构思自己的文章。下午，用30-40分钟的时间直接动笔。

下面就和小编一起看看写作高分范文讲解吧。

Some people say that  technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Do you  agree or disagree?

作文内容：

As technology tends to be a  vital part of our daily life, it makes people not only enjoy the convenience  it has brought, but also worry about its side-effects on children’s  creativity. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the point that technology  can decrease children’s innovation.

It is widely accepted that  a large number of childrenprefer to holding their electronic devices, such as ipads,  laptops or mobile phones to kill their leisure time rather than be[P1]involved in social  activities. Gradually, they maylose their communication with [P2]peers and the whole  society, which leads to the self-concerned character[P3]. As a result, they are  stopped from innovating when they start to ignore the surroundings filled  with minor matters.

There is no denying that  technology has speeded up our life and eliminated lots of trouble. For  instance, there is abundant information provided to the teenagers, quite  beneficial for theirextension of wisdom[P4]. However, when they  come across some questions about lessons, the first choice of them becomes  browsing Internet instead of thinking about them on their own. This really  does harm to the cultivation of their learning habits and also damages theircritical  thinking skills[P5].

In conclusion, although  technology has benefits for children’s development to some extent, its  shortcomings overweigh its advantages when it comes to the creativity of children.

[P1]Prefer to do sth. rather than do sth. Prefer to hold

[P2]建议用Lack communication with 缺乏与同龄人之间的交流

[P3]建议改成Which may lead to their being self-centered, may可以让文章显得不太绝对，self-concerned character中式表达/重复，self-centered以自我为中心的

[P4]建议改成Gain of wisdom

[P5]Critical thinking skils还可以再展开，或者直接删去

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