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ACT写作满分范文讲解(一)

  • 2019-01-21     
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  ACT写作和托福写作的文体一致,都是议论文,作文结构也基本一致,但是考查重点各有侧重。

  托福是语言类考试,所以托福写作注重考查学生的语言能力,如词汇、句型、语法等;而ACT是学术类考试,ACT写作注重考查学生的思维能力,如对一些常见社会话题的判断和思考、使用适当的论据和论证支持观点、观点表达的连贯性和逻辑性等。

  ACT写作考查的重点也正是考生的备考难点。今天课窝考试网就是说说关于ACT写作高分思路讲解。

  ACT写作

  Intelligent Machines

  Many of the goods and services we depend on daily are now supplied by intelligent, automated machines rather than human beings. Robots build cars and other goods on assembly lines, where once there were human workers. Many of our phone conversations are now conducted not with people but with sophisticated technologies. We can now buy goods at a variety of stores without the help of a human cashier. Automation is generally seen as a sign of progress, but what is lost when we replace humans with machines? Given the accelerating variety and prevalence of intelligent machines, it is worth examining the implications and meaning of their presence in our lives.

ACT写作满分范文讲解(一)

  Read and carefully consider these perspectives. Each suggests a particular way of thinking about the increasing presence of intelligent machines.

  Perspective 1 :What we lose with the replacement of people by machines is some part of our own humanity. Even our mundane daily encounters no longer require from us basic courtesy, respect, and tolerance for other people.

  Perspective 2:Machines are good at low-skill, repetitive jobs, and at high-speed, extremely precise jobs. In both cases they work better than humans. This efficiency leads to a more prosperous and progressive world for everyone.

  Perspective 3:Intelligent machines challenge our long-standing ideas about what humans are or can be. This is good because it pushes both humans and machines toward new, unimagined possibilities.

  首先我们看到的是开头段:

  Advances in technology have become so widely accepted in today’s culture that very few people are willing to pause to consider the consequences. People get so excited about what new technologies can offer that they forget to question whether there might be any negative effects. Without caution and deliberation, replacing the natural with the mechanical would undoubtedly be disastrous.

  我们可以看到,在这个开头段中,作者用了3个句子。在第一句话中,作者首先对这篇题目的背景进行了铺陈,也就是现在人都很欣然地接受了科技的进步而没有考虑一下可能同时出现的后果。那么在写这个背景的时候,作者通过一个词把自己的态度隐隐的表达了出来。是consequence这个词,叫不好的结果或者恶果。

  紧接着的第二句话,是反方的观点。作者写到,人们都因为科技能带来的东西而觉得非常的兴奋而忘记去想可能会有的负面影响。从这句话中,其实我们已经能比较清楚的了解到作者的态度了。

  最后一句话,引出自己的主题,不经过深思熟虑就把自然的东西都用机械去代替,一定会是灾难性的。所以在这个开头中,作者用3句话的层层深入,最终引入了自己的中心思想。那么大家可以把结构记成:背景铺陈+反方观点+己方观点。

  那么接下来我们看看在满分范文中的第一个中间段是怎么写的吧:

  The economic implications of the potential mechanical takeover alone should be enough to dissuade anyone from moving too fast.In the event the robots are more widely used in the workplace, humans would surely be replaced. At first, businesses would benefit from the efficiency of robots, but eventually a depressed job market would lead to a population that struggles just to feed themselves and their families, let alone purchase the products these robots make. In the long run, society will suffer if it does not take care to prevent the economic consequences of giving everything over to machines.

  这段的话意思是机械代替人工可能带来的潜在的经济上的问题可以劝服大家不要发展的太快。在大量使用机器人的工作场所中,人类肯定会被代替。最初的时候,厂家会收益于机器人的高工作效率。但是,最终,这种萧条的职业市场会导致有很多人没有办法喂饱自己和家人,就更别说去购买机器人制作的产品了。所以,从长远的角度来看,如果不阻止把所有东西都交给机器做可能带来的经济上的后果,整个社会都会遭殃。

  我们看到这里会发现几个事情:

  首先,这个文章的第一段针对的是文章的第二个perspective。所以咱们在写作文的时候,是不需要一定要按照题目给出的perspectives的顺序来行文的。

  其次,我们可以发现,在perspective 2中,题目认为用机器代替人类是一件好事儿。但是,在作者看来,这种工作效率的提高只会在最初期是一个好事,因为很多人会因为被机械代替而失业,从而导致丧失了购买力。所以作者只能是反对perspective 2的。

  接下来我们来分析作者的写法

  首先,作者给出了自己的主题句,表达出了对题目中perspective的否定。

  然后,接下来这句话是重点,In the event the robots are more widely used in the workplace, humans would surely be replaced. At first, businesses would benefit from the efficiency of robots…这句话是在解释题中的perspective,也就是我们在之前的评分标准中看到的analysis的部分。

  那么当我们在否定一个perspective的时候,同学们要记得首先,我们要先分析为什么题干中的perspective是这么想的。然后是我们的idea的发展部分。接下去的事情我们就看到了,作者用另两句话去证明了自己的观点。从而达到了评分标准中的development and support的要求

  以上就是小编为大家整理的关于ACT写作中范文思路讲解。更多ACT考试科目、ACT考试流程等我问题可以咨询我们。

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